LYNDON, Kianna Lee

[kianna]

KIANNA LEE LYNDON

"Life is a climb. But the view is great."

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I AM BEYOND GOD

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I AM HUMAN
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Full Name: Kianna Lee Lyndon
Nickname(s): Ki, Lee-lee
Gender: Female
Age: Fifteen
Birthdate: August 14th, 1993
Sexuality: Bi

Reincarnate: Yes
I am: Jane Austen
Played By: Nina Dobrev

Grade: freshman
Boarding: Yes

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OUR SHINING FUTURE

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IN REVOLT
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Height: 5'4"
Weight: 145 lbs
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color: Black
Build: Average
Scars: None
Piercings/Tattoos: Neither

Personal Style: Kianna likes bright colors, namely blue and red. She dislikes wearing black, although she does use it whenever she feels serious, or for formal events.

As for things she likes to wear, Kianna often throws on skinny jeans, short sleeved or strapless blouses and sometimes skirts and dresses. She enjoys wearing heels and cute sandals. Also, she compliments her outfits with crazy jewelry, often made with shiny beads, seashells and things like that. She also wears a good luck amulet around her neck: a necklace with a moon shaped charm.

Appearance: Kianna has long, curly hair, although she always straightens it, because she likes it better that way. Often, she her hair back into a plait of a ponytail. Her skin is lightly tanned and she's a little bit short for her age, but that doesn't really bother her.

Also, she tends to draw and write things on her left palm, so that she won't forget them. She does this with a blue marker or a red pen. She has the habit of biting her fingernails, so they don't look that pretty.

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HOPE AND HORROR

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Likes: Music, dancing, drawing, sweet food, animals, bright colors, fantasy novels, reading, writing, daydreaming.
Dislikes: Sarcasm, lies, people who like to bother other people, bitter things, technology, global warming, wise talk, bullies, the dark, snakes, scorpions.
Dreams: Becoming a famous novelist.
Fears: Death, spiders, failure.
Habits/Hobbies: Draws in on her hands, bites her nails, speaks very fastly, tends to get mad easily.
Secret(s): She dislikes technology because she doesn't understand it(she tried many times but in the end gave up).

Personality: Kianna is very strange. Her moods tend to switche easily from happy to sad and from calm to furious--most likely because she's a bipolar. She doesn't really socialize, since her...er...bipolarity often leads people to thinking she's insane or a freak. As such, she has found it very hard to trust people. Her moods tend to go to the extremes whenever they switch (she's very hyper when she gets happy and extremely agressive whenever she's mad), and so she has to take some medication that make her calm down a little, she acts pretty much like a noral person after taking it.

She's taken her bipolarity as a small inspiration for psychological works, and she likes to write instead of just getting out her anger or depression on people. If anyone shows that they care, she'll become very kind and sweet to people, and also very defensive, to the point of even daring to beat up anyone who bothers her and her very few friends. Also, she's really drawn to literature and reading. This is a good thing because she enjoys studying and learning, but it is also a bad thing, due to the fact that she can become really obsessive, to the point of staying awake several nights to study harder. Also, she's extremely stubborn, and won't change her mind easily.

Besides, Kianna speaks pretty much in the same way people did in Austen's times, and her manners are a lot like back then--she curtsies and things like that, and her personality when she's calm is pretty much the same as Jane Austen's--she was described by her family's memories as 'good quiet'.

PRETTY BOY, PRETTY GIRL

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Mother: Alice Lyndon, 38, housewife
Father: Marcus Lyndon, 40, salesperson/waiter
Siblings: Adrienne, 10, student.
Hometown: London, England

History: Kianna's family is very poor. Her mother, Alice, developed a heart disease, and her treaments and medication are too expensive. As such, her father stands two poorly paid jobs to support the family, and Kianna was forced to leave school at a very young age, after a lot of trouble with social services. She was homeschooled, and when her sister Adrienne was born, Kianna took the responibility of watching after her, and also helping her study.

Kianna didn't have any problem with having to stay at home to help around the house and take care of her little sister. In fact, it was in such a way that she started to get into literature. At the age of ten, she started to recall things from her past life, such as being sick with typhus and nearly dying because of that, and then being homeschooled, her writing, moving around with her family and even her death due to Addison's disease. However, she really realized what was going on when one day she picked up a copy of Pride and Prejudice and suddenly recalled writing it. The same happened with works such as Mansfield Park and Sense and Sensibility. She was about to tell her family about such strange experiences when suddenly, her mother's disease became worse.

By then, Kianna had started to develop her bipolar disorder, but she wasn't diagnosed with it until one day, she snapped at her sister--who was by then her closest friend-- out of nowhere. After she calmed down, she got really scared about what had happened and ran to her father for help. She was taken to a psychologist who diagnosed her and gave her some medication. Kianna considered telling him about the memories she had as Jane Austen, but decided not to do so, feeling that nobody would believe her. She decided to give up on writing for a while, but in reality never actually stopped and managed several works. During all that time, she also went on reading her previous works as Austen and found it really strange, yet nice to read them all.

She returned to school at the age of 15 after a few years of homeschooling, and one day she entered a writing competition she didn't win. However, she was offered a scolarship to Riverdale by a judge who was actually a teacher. She accepted it willingly, since that would take a lot of pressure from her family, as by then her mother's disease had become nearly terminal. Kianna has not been rectruited to the RSOR yet.

I AM WHO I AM

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Name/Alias: Ani, the Mexican Mangaka
Age: Sixteen


Post Sample:

Natsumi-

I stared at Keiji. "N-no...I....I swear..."I stammered. But my uncle was mad. I could see it--the fire of rage burning in his eyes.

"Let's summarize, can we?"he said, kindly. Falsely kind.

"First of all, you bother me with your stupid rants. Secondly, you run away from the feast...and now this,"he said while looking at Kohaku as well. I shook my head and glared at him firecely. "He didn't do anything wrong, I was the one who kissed him!"I yelled. Keiji raised an eyebrow.

"Come down here, both of you."

I flushed and came down. And so did Kohaku. Keiji glared at both of us.

"Kohaku, you have dared to defy my orders. I expressely said that we wouldn't think of Natsumi during the feast. And you kissed her,"he growled at Kohaku. "I kissed him!,"I corrected. "SHUT UP, NATSUMI!"he yelled. A hand sliced the air and struck me right across the face. I stumbled and Kohaku caught me. "Are you alright?"he asked concernedly. I nodded dazedly.

"And YOU!"he yelled at Kohaku. All of a sudden, he started to beat him up so fiercely that I thought he was going to kill him. And he seemed up to it.

"NO!!!"I yelled. I saw Kohaku falling to the ground, not moving, bleeding. I threw myself upon him protectively.

"Natsumi. Get out of the way,"Keiji spat. I shook my head.

"No, no, no please...take me, punish me instead..."I begged. He raised an eyebrow, then smirked. "Fine,"he said, with a low, sarcastic chuckle. All of a sudden he grabbed my wrist and dragged me into the Main House. I gave no resistance. He opened the door of one of the rooms. Everything there was darkness. I gasped. He noticed that.

"You can always change your mind..."he said. "You can either stay here forever, or I could go and snap your boyfriend's neck..."I panicked.

"No...no...I'll...stay here...Forever..."I whispered. He smirked and threw me into the dark room, locking the door behind me. I curled up into a corner and let a few tears escape my eyes.


Kohaku-

I woke up at the Main House. My head pounded and I felt like I'd been run over. I looked around dazed and confused.

And just then I remembered how mad Keiji was.

Instantly I tried to jump from the couch, which brought a bolt of pain on my side and I was forced down.

"Don't,"Ami's voice commanded. She was there, along with Mai and Kameko. Keiji was nowhere to be seen.

But someone else was missing, and only then I realized it.

"Where's Natsumi?"I asked, fearing that I might start to shout at any moment.

When everyone explained it to me, it took me at least a whole minute to react.

"WHAT?! WHY???!!! DID SHE GO CRAZY???!!! I'M NOT EVEN WORTH IT!!!!!"I yelled, horrified.

"Calm down!"Ami begged. "She'll be alright, just..."

But I interrupted her.

"No, you don't understand, Natsumi's capable of anything...anything! She'd even kill herself....I have to get her out of there!"I snapped, trying to stand once more. Kameko's hand moved along my face until she found my cheek.

"You can't,"she said calmly. "Keiji is mad at you already. You can't give him a reason to get madder,"she added. I forced myself not to cry as she spoke. Deep down I knew she was right. But still...

If I knew Natsumi well, she'd break down in a few minutes. Even if she tried to put up a tough front, she'd never tolerated the dark. I knew it. I remembered her telling me that the sole thought of that room gave her nightmares.

I felt helpless and broke to tears.
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And yes, all of that was written by me XD

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application format by dante/dante in ze pot. lyrics from 'wreak havoc' by angelspit. nothing will chase you down if you remove the credits, but i'd rather you not. that is all.

[Dante in ze pot]

I really hate to do this, you being the first member ever and all, but there are several things that need to be fixed.

Firstly, was she held back or the like? Most freshmen are 14 or 15 years old. In her history she left school, so I'll assume so. If not, you'd need to bump her up a grade.

Beyond that, the first few sections are well enough, but when it comes to personality, you must elaborate some. Those paragraphs are very small and don't tell me a lot about her. Bipolar people have a lot to them: has she ever gotten suicidal, when she's happy is she bouncing-off-the-walls happy? Does she take medication? How does this affect her writing, her being? How does she cope? If she takes medication, what is she like on those medications? Why doesn't she understand technology? Has she tried to do so? Also, staying awake for several nights in a row is impossible. But that's probably just how I read it. xD

If she is Jane Austen, do a quick google of her personality. Since they are one and the same, you can, if you want, add her personality in - in fact, I'd recommended throwing in more than just a love or writing. You don't have to know a whole ton about her, just a few things if you can find them.

I need you to go deeper into her. Think about her as being profiled. If I needed to know everything about her, what would you say? I'll be more than willing to help if you need it. =)

Nextly, her history is very short...and as much as I hate to say it, you went about the reincarnation thing a little strangely. Going back to her being bipolar, how was she diagnosed? When? What happened to her mother? What was her relation to her sister? Her leaving school would also probably be illegal - did social services every catch up, or did they get away with it? When was she re-enrolled? She'd had to have been at some point prior to Riverdale, to end up there. If she hadn't, I'll need you to rework her history totally. It leaves a lot of questions and doesn't really tell me a lot. Because she is a reincarnate, has she joined RSOR yet, or has yet to be recruited? Is her mother terminally ill?

Moving on to the reincarnation thing, if she was Jane Austen she would have known her works - not unconsciously copied them. She would have known she wrote them. She'd have known what it was like to die, her childhood years, etc., etc., and would have always known them. For example, Isabella remembers her death very clearly (as Joan of Arc, she was burned alive), and has a terrible fire phobia because of it. Build off the previous life. Would it get awkward for her, to say, have to read her works in school? Would she get angry if someone interperted the words of her past life the wrong way?

Lastly, I need a actual roleplay sample; a post that you did with a previous character, or you could make one up, but it needs to be something you would make in a roleplay thread, and be at least 370 words.

Like I said before, I'd be more than willing to help you bring the app up to par, either on this thread or via PM. =)

-Dante

[Dante in ze pot]

I'm really sorry, but there are still issues with the app.

This one is minor: Now that you took her age down a year, you just need to alter her birth year; she needs to have been born in 1995 to be 15.

Next, her personality just seems to have Jane Austen's tagged on; which is fine-ish. However, it doesn't make sense given the fact she is bipolar. She curtsies, she's "good quiet", and so forth...but yet she can be hyper or exceptionally aggressive at the drop of a pin due to her disorder. You need to make this tie make sense. It can all work together, but you need to find a way to make it seem so, otherwise she's going to confuse people, and think about it: how do you play a character that doesn't make sense even with a disorder that will cause her not to make as much sense as one sans it? Here's some info for you, courtesy of Dee.

Each different "mood" falls under a category. When a bipolar is unmedicated and they usually get very aggressive, irritated and withdrawn. They will likely yell at people who try and approach them and their sentences are broken up much like a schizophrenics commonly are. They get very depressed and self loathing as well. On a common day, completely medicated, it's like a normal moody person. Their mood can change by the drop of a hat, but it's controlled. They have a tendency to get clingy and affectionate at times.

Try describing each mood she has: Depressive, Manic, Hypermanic, and Mixed Affective. It would pretty much explain each aspect of her personality and the moods she can switch between. Is she Jane Austen when she's medicated? Is that who she'd like to be; or is she someone else naturally, since she doesn't seem (from her history) to feel completely the same person, as other reincarnates may. Draw from her experiences in her history to get her personality - sometimes I write histories first, then personalities to do just that, so everything is accounted for.

Moving on to her history, it's been fixed pretty well! There are just one or two things, really. Firstly, social services wouldn't give her family crap because she's taken out to be homeschooled, but I don't understand how a very ill mother, who cannot take care of herself would home school two children, or how a father with two jobs would be able to do so; was there another relative involved in this process?

Next, I don't think she'd be diagnosed as bipolar for snapping at her sister and just that. It's not exactly something that anyone would want to diagnose in a kid, so they'd probably have waited. I'm not sure I understand what you mean. I read a book (autobiography) of a bipolar person and while I'm sure experiences vary, Kianna doesn't seem to have to deal with /any/ depression, which is untrue for the entire spectrum.

The last issue that I have here is probably just a typo on your part. Having been "home schooled for a few years" does not make sense if Kianna had to leave school at a very young age - which makes me think four or five - which would mean she'd have been home schooled for a decade, not a few years! You could even use this in her personality, if you wanted; maybe Riverdale would freak her out; all the people and things going on, the need for technology, and so forth.

Lastly, I can't accept the roleplay samples. Both are in first person, but even disregarding that, neither are at the bare minimum 370 word count. I'm sorry. D :

- Dante

[Dante in ze pot]

THIS APPLICATION HAS BEEN REJECTED.

This application has not met the stated application and/or admin standards twice now; both leaving a long line of things to fix. Additionally, the member has not logged in for 10 days at the time of this post.

If you are the owner of this application and would like to try again (and already have a fixed app) please PM either Dante or Dee with your case.

-Dante